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Monday, April 20, 2020

writing work week 2

There is a girl with a red jacket and a white hat. The girl is siting on a very old fish boat. It has a white window on the side. There are four small fishes under the sea. The boat has a red windmill at the tail. The sky looks dark but sill have clouds. And the sun is hiding under the clouds.
The girl ran away because her parents died. She had no food.So she has to go fishing by herself to get some food. She lived in a old rusty boat because she has no one to live with. She always sit and look through the window to remember her parents.  She eats fish for breakfast, lunch and dinner. The boat looked like a big fish. The girl miss her parents. She fishes every day. The girl is holding on a fish rod that looks like a stick. The boat has a little door on the top of the boat. But she can sill fit inside that door. Sometimes The girl looks at the fishes  and other kinds of sea animals that lives in the sea. But the most thing the girl does is fishing. Fishing is her favourite thing to do.




6 comments:

  1. Andy you have been busy!
    This is a great start to your writing. You might need to think about what else you could include in your story.
    Miss Gill.

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    1. Hi Miss Gill, I will need to think.

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    2. I have update my writing.

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  2. Hi Andy,
    This is a very mysterious story. Why are they on the boat? I think they might be running away from somewhere. Where are they trying to get to? I can't wait to read more.
    Mrs Roach

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  3. Hi Mrs Roach, They are running away

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